50 Shades Freed (and not as previously reported, Darker) chapter 23 recap or “THE FOG.”

Before we get going into the recap proper, a member of Troutnation needs your help. She has three beautiful children that she is in danger of losing to her abusive ex-husband, who is countering claims that she has abused the children. Alleging that the fleeing partner is guilty of child abuse is a common tactic of abusers; it deflects the attention away from their abuse and puts the fleeing partner– who is often short of resources to defend hirself– on the defensive. I’ve known many women who have lost their children because they dared to leave, and I’m fucking sick of it. If you can help out monetarily, that would be great. If you can’t, please boost her signal and help her reach her goal, so she has a chance at fair representation in court. THE LINK IS HERE.

Let me start off this recap by saying that I love, love, L-O-V-E love the way you guys look forward to my recaps. I really do. And in the past, I’ve kicked my own ass trying to keep these recaps on some kind of regular schedule. But as much fun as I have doing them, I do have obligations in my life that sometimes impose upon my laborious slog through blogging these bullshit books. These are mentally stressful and time consuming (each chapter clocks in at around eight hours worth of work), so please, please be patient with me if I’m not jumping right on the chapters with the same speed I was at the beginning of this death march. Early on in my recaps of the first book, I said that this was going to be like a marathon. It’s actually turned out to be more like the marathon from Run, Fatboy, Run. I am Simon Pegg, trying to run a marathon on a broken ankle here. So I hope you all understand.

Also, a lot of you have been asking if I would blog “the last chapter of.” Oh, what dear, sweet, optimistic things you are. We’ve still got chapters twenty-five and twenty-six, as well as a sixteen page epilogue, a short-story from four-year-old Christian’s ridiculously stilted POV, and the beginning events of 50 Shades of Grey written from Chedward’s POV. We are not done. We are not done by a long shot.

And can I just, while we’re on this subject… what the fuck is up with people writing a book in the heroine’s first person POV, then rewriting the same book from the hero’s first person POV? From a reader’s perspective, that doesn’t even sound remotely interesting to me; I cannot think of a single book I would want to read over, from a different POV. Even if you handed me a copy of Les Miserables and you were like, “Oh yeah, same book, but it’s all from Javert’s POV,” I would be like, “Nah, I’m good with the original, thanks.” I could thoroughly understand writing the first book in the series from one POV, then writing the next from the opposite POV, but I can’t for the life of me imagine why someone would want to read the same story twice. And from a writing standpoint, I break out into a cold sweat just imagining it. If you mess up one tiny little detail, you’re going to hear about it, because if a reader liked the first book enough to reread it from a second POV, they’re going to have liked it enough to remember all the little details you can’t avoid fucking up. So from now on, if you’re writing a book, and there are pertinent details in the other character’s view point, why not just– and this is revolutionary, I tell ya– put all that shit into the book in the first damn place?

Now that I’ve got my Andy Rooney pants firmly strapped on, let’s hit this recap like the truck I’d like to hit both Ana and Chedward with.

When we last left Bella Ana, she had just gone to the dance studio the ransom drop to save her mom Mia from James the vampire Jack Hyde the stalker. Even though she had no proof that her mom Mia was being held by James the vampire  Jack the stalker, she didn’t tell anyone, not even Edward Cullen, who finds her just in time and heroically rescues her.

Now, Bella Ana is in the hospital, trying super hard not to look anything like she’s in the “Bella becomes a vampire” portion of Breaking Dawn. But she’s just not that good at looking like her own character, because this is what happens next:

There is only pain. My head, my chest… burning pain. My side, my arm. Pain. Pain and hushed words in the gloom. Where am I? Though I try, I cannot open my eyes. The whispered words become clearer… a beacon in the darkness.

I feel guilty comparing this chapter to the Bella-turns-into-a-vampire chapter in Breaking Dawn, because Breaking Dawn is written better. Through the melodrama, Ana hears:

“Her ribs are bruised, Mr. Grey, and she has a hairline fracture to her skull, but her vital signs are stable and strong.”

“Why is she still unconscious?”

“Mrs. Grey has had a major contusion to her head. But her brain activity is normal, and she has no cerebral swelling. She’ll wake when she’s ready. Just give her some time.”

“And the baby?” The words are anguished, breathless.

“The baby’s fine, Mr. Grey.”

“Oh, thank God.” The words are a litany… a prayer.

Yeah, we know what a litany is. We’re not stupid. Also, I refuse to believe that Ana’s brain activity is normal. This is a woman who thinks Tess of The D’Urbervilles is a romantic comedy. Not only is the presence of normal brain activity questionable at best, but so is the presence of any brain at all.

By they by, because this is totally not Breaking Dawn, Ana keeps conveniently waking up for exposition points and lapsing into unconsciousness when the reader’s question has been answered. Let’s count them as we go, shall we?

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.

When she wakes again:

My eyes and mouth are resolutely shut, unwilling to open.

Again, thanks for clearing that up for us, Ana, because we couldn’t tell they were unwilling to open from the part of the sentence where you said they were resolutely shut.

In this slice of awareness, Ana overhears Christian arguing with his father about leaving Ana’s side, and she overhears their conversation about Mia, who was roofied by Jack Hyde. Also, Ana saved Mia’s life, which we all saw coming. I mean, we’ve heard about Ana’s bravery over and over again for three books, right?

“I know. I’m feeling seven kinds of foolish for relenting on her security. You warned me, but Mia is so stubborn. If it wasn’t for Ana here…”

So, there we have Carrick, telling his son, “You’re right. The only way to protect these headstrong young women is by keeping them on total lockdown. I should have listened.” Which is exactly what Christian Grey needs: a man he admires backing up his shitty misogynist ideas.

And Carrick, don’t you mean you’re feeling seven shades of foolish?

Carrick tells Christian that Ana is a “remarkable young woman,” which we keep hearing over and over again from so many different characters, yet we’ve never once seen proof of in the book. If anything, with all the pratfalls, the utter lack of any life experience, and the fact that she almost never talks in front of secondary characters, they should believe that she’s completely unremarkable.

It was at this point in the chapter, by the way, that I realized we were going to have to read about Ana being “brave” about a hundred and fifty times per page.

Ana’s unconscious again, so the score now is:

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
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That looks like a dude forcefully exhaling a massive bong rip.

The very next sentence, by the way, is:

The fog lifts but I have no sense of time.

Just in case you were keeping tags on what THE FOG was doing.

Hey, I bet you thought the tampon scene was the grossest thing you’d ever read in this series. Let’s just take a look here…

“If you don’t take her across your knee, I sure as hell will. What the hell was she thinking?”

“Trust me, Ray, I just might do that.”

Let’s examine all the ways this is fucking disturbing. One, we know all about Ana and Chedward’s bedroom activities, and how often they involve spankings, or sexy threats of spankings. In addition, we know that Ana and Chedward are masters of the uncomfortable innuendo, so you know where Christian’s mind is. That’s one point for gross. The second, more disturbing point of grossness is that Ana’s father is telling her husband to beat her, because it’s what she deserves. And it marks the second time in this chapter that an older male figure has backed up Christian in his belief that women should be treated like unruly children.

Ana’s out again, so:

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…

Someone should type up this entire section of the book, and find/replace “fog” with “burning,” then print the file. I bet money a hardbound copy of Breaking Dawn shoots out of your printer.

Ana comes to again to hear Christian arguing with a detective, telling him that Ana is in no condition to be questioned. You know the police, always trying to interrogate coma patients. What does the detective say, when Chedward says Ana can’t be questioned?

“She’s a headstrong young woman, Mr. Grey.”

Wait, what? I understand that what E.L. is trying to do here is have the detective grudgingly praise Ana to reinforce to the reader just how brave and headstrong and totally like a real, not two-dimensional character Ana is in spite of the overwhelming evidence to the contrary. But it just sounds like he’s accusing her of being stubborn for being in the coma and unwilling to answer his questions.

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We learn that Elizabeth is informing on Jack, and Jack is “twisted” which we already knew from the hundred and fifty-seven other times he’s been described as twisted, and then… THE FOG!

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…
  4. The fog surrounds me once more, and I’m dragged down… down. No!

Then she hears Christian and his mother arguing over the fact that Ana and Christian were having marital troubles, and we are blessedly spared the fog:

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…
  4. The fog surrounds me once more, and I’m dragged down… down. No!
  5. The world dips and blurs and I’m gone.

But then she comes-to again in the middle of another discussion between Christian and his mom:

“You told me you’d cut all ties.” Grace is talking. Her voice is quiet, admonishing.

“I know.” Christian sounds resigned. “But seeing her finally put it all in perspective for me. You know… with the child. For the first time I felt… What we did… it was wrong.”

“What she did, darling… Children will do that to you. Make you look at the world in a different light.”

Remember when Grace first found out about Mrs. Robinson and Christian’s statutory naughty times? And she blamed Christian for it? She’s certainly changed her tune now, hasn’t she?

Another thing I find troubling about this section is that we don’t find out what, exactly, Christian is referring to. What they did was wrong… but what? Having sex? The BDSM stuff? The lying? I have this horrible feeling that he means the BDSM, because that’s the road these books have been going down since the moment he opened the playroom door. He needs to be cured of liking BDSM.

And guess who’ll do that? THE BABY! Because babies = nobody ever needing or wanting sex again.

Look, I’m a parent. I’m not going to lie and say that having kids doesn’t change your outlook on life. But I get really pissed off when people act like it changes it to a superior outlook on life. That’s such a crock. Having kids hasn’t made me wiser or more in tune with my sense of right and wrong. I’m just as much of a fuck up as I was before I had kids. The only thing I’ve become more aware of is how to clean gum out of things.

Grace also says:

“[…] I think you can only be truly mad at someone you really love.”

What? That doesn’t even make sense, Grace. Everyone on this planet can think of a time they’ve been truly mad at someone they didn’t even know that well. If being mad at someone means you love them, then the next time I take a bite out of a magic apple, wheel my glass coffin into the capitol building and let any Republican have a crack at me. I’ll be awakened by true love’s kiss in no time.

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Wake up! Oh god, wake up, Ted Cruz is looking over here!

Remember how everyone was like, “Christian gets so much better! You just don’t understand how a series works?” And now we’re getting close to the end of the third book and we’ve yet to see him make literally any progress as a human being, and he has in fact regressed to the mental state of a toddler?

Well, the wait is over. For Christian Grey is about to have THE BIG REVELATION:

“I thought about it, and she’s shown me over and over how much she loves me… to the point of putting her own life in danger.”

No. That’s Stockholm syndrome that you’re seeing. But it doesn’t matter, because this is the point where Christian miraculously becomes… whatever the 50 Shades fans seem to believe is “better,” for some reason.

And then Ana passes out, so:

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…
  4. The fog surrounds me once more, and I’m dragged down… down. No!
  5. The world dips and blurs and I’m gone.
  6. Oh… the darkness closes in. No–
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Whatever happened to these guys? They were awesome. Are they just playing comas now or what?

Then Ana wakes up a little and it’s STILL Christian and his mom talking, but now it’s so we can hear Grace talk about being a grandmother, and

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…
  4. The fog surrounds me once more, and I’m dragged down… down. No!
  5. The world dips and blurs and I’m gone.
  6. Oh… the darkness closes in. No–
  7. Sweet oblivion beckons.

Then Ana wakes up to feel Christian’s stubble on her hand, and he’s saying how sorry he is and how much he loves her and

  1. I relax, and unconsciousness claims me once more, stealing me away from the pain.
  2. The fog closes in.
  3. I fight the fog… fight… But I spiral down once more into oblivion. No…
  4. The fog surrounds me once more, and I’m dragged down… down. No!
  5. The world dips and blurs and I’m gone.
  6. Oh… the darkness closes in. No–
  7. Sweet oblivion beckons.
  8. But my body disobeys me, and I fall asleep once more.

Remember what I said before about starting with a character waking and ending with a character going to sleep, and how that can make a book feel terrible? IT JUST HAPPENED EIGHT TIMES IN FOUR PAGES. I seriously feel like I need a nap right now.

Finally, Ana wakes up for real, not just to give us exposition:

I have a pressing need to pee. I open my eyes. I’m in the clean, sterile environment of a hospital room.

Where the fuck did you think you were? Just tucked away in somebody’s garage? Down in the basement, behind the Christmas decorations?

She runs her fingers through Christian’s hair, because he’s sleeping with his head on his folded arms at her bedside. He wakes up, sees she’s out of her coma, and they IMMEDIATELY START FIGHTING.

“Ana, stay still. I’ll call a nurse.” He quickly stands, alarmed, and reaches for a buzzer on the bedside.

“Please,” I whisper. Why do I ache everywhere? “I need to get up.” Jeez, I feel so weak.

“Will you do as you’re told for once?” he snaps, exasperated.

The nurse comes in:

She must be in her fifties, though her hair is jet black.

Are you suggesting these things are mutually exclusive, E.L.?

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I mean, really? Are we doing this?

Ana waking from a coma is a total non-event to this nurse, by the way. She doesn’t go to get a doctor or anything. It’s just like, Oh, this patient is awake now? That’s cool. Now, I’m not a medical-type person, but I did work in the ICU/NCU of a hospital before, and I’ve been around when people wake up from days long comas. It wasn’t just like, “Oh hey, glad to see you’re up, no big deal.” It wasn’t an emergency or anything, but nurses and doctors got in there pretty quick to examine the patient. But whatever, we know this isn’t even slightly based in reality. Ana wants to get up to go to the bathroom, but the nurse tells her she has a catheter.

“Let me remove your catheter. Mr. Grey, I am sure Mrs. Grey would like some privacy.” She looks pointedly at Christian, dismissing him.

“I’m not going anywhere.” He glares back at her.

“Christian, please,” I whisper, reaching out and grasping his hand. Briefly he squeezes my hand, then gives me an exasperated look. “Please,” I beg.

“Fine!” he snaps and runs his hand through his hair. “You have two minutes,” he hisses at the nurse, and he leans down to kiss my forehead before turning on his heel and leaving the room.

In real life, I guarantee that nurse calls security and takes her damn time. Christian is behaving in a threatening manner toward her while she’s just trying to see to the best interest of her patient. This is something that will continue to happen, by the way, because Christian Grey knows better than medical professionals what Ana needs.

After Ana’s catheter is out, Christian “bursts” in. Nurse Nora is helping Ana from the bed to the bathroom. LOL, no. Ana said she had a “pressing need” to urinate at the beginning of the section. If she had to pee that bad, I guarantee she already did when the nurse pulled her catheter. But whatever.

“Let me take her,” he says and strides toward us.

“Mr. Grey, I can manage,” Nurse Nora scolds him.

He gives her a hostile glare. “Damnit, she’s my wife. I’ll take her,” he says through gritted teeth as he moves the IV stand out of his way.

“Mr. Grey!” she protests.

He ignores her, leans down, and gently lifts me off the bed. I wrap my arms around his neck, my body complaining.

Your body is complaining because you need to move it, and Christian doesn’t want you to because he knows better than the nurse (who was walking you to the bathroom for a purpose. She could have just brought you a bedpan, moron).

“Mrs. Grey, you’re too light,” he mutters disapprovingly as he sets me gently on my feet.

I’m starting to get really concerned about Ana’s metabolism, okay? We saw that she lost an alarming amount of weight in the five days she and Christian were broken up. We find out later that she’s been unconscious for twenty-four hours. She’s been in this coma, let’s assume that if she was losing a ton of weight they would have started giving her high calorie feedings through an NG tube… how did she lose enough weight that Christian can tell just by lifting her?

But way to body police your wife within minutes of her coming out of a coma. Maybe you should comment on how her hair looks, as well.

Tentatively, I sit down on the toilet.

“Go.” I try to wave him out.

“No. Just pee, Ana.”

Could this be any more embarrassing? “I can’t, not with you here.”

“You might fall.”

“Mr. Grey!”

We both ignore the nurse.

“Please,” I beg.

He raises his hands in defeat. “I’ll stand outside, door open.” He takes a couple of paces back until he’s standing just outside the door with the angry nurse.

Yeah, uh, he’s definitely getting security called on him. The patient is saying, “you are making me uncomfortable, visitor,” and the visitor is refusing to comply with the patient’s request for privacy? Chedward would be out of there.

Nurse Nora has to examine Ana when she gets back from the bathroom:

“How do you feel?” she asks me, her voice laced with sympathy and a trace of irritation, which I suspect is for Christian’s benefit.

She’s just distracted, trying to figure out if she should involve a hospital social worker or just jam domestic violence pamphlets into your bag when you’re discharged.

Ana tells Christian that she’s hungry– and this time, it’s actually for food!

“What do you want to eat?”

“Anything. Soup.”

“Mr. Grey, you’ll need the doctor’s approval before Mrs. Grey can eat.”

He gazes at her impassively for a moment, then takes his BlackBerry out of his pants pocket and presses a number.

“Ana wants chicken soup… Good… Thank you.” He hangs up.

I glance at Nora, whose eyes narrow at Christian.

I’m sure we’re supposed to interpret this scene as Christian valiantly protecting his wife and tenderly caring for her. But in reality, what he’s doing is going against medical advice. All the nurse is suggesting is that the doctor give the go ahead before he starts cramming Ana full of food she might not even be able to hold down.

Christian tells Ana that Mia was drugged, and he tells Ana how “brave” she was and how stupid it was to get involved in the ransom without telling him– he doesn’t remind her it’s also stupid to do such a thing and not involve the authorities– and then he expresses his totally original and not at all repeated every single time something dramatic happens to the two of these overdramatic morons feelings about what happened to Ana:

“I have died a thousand deaths since Thursday.”

He said something similar when he proposed to her, and I believe Ana “died a thousand deaths” while Christian was missing in the helicopter incident. I could be misremembering on that last one, but the point is… I would be happy with them dying just one death. Just one.

Preferably grisly enough that open casket would be impractical.

Hey, what happened to Jack?

“In police custody. Although Hyde is here under guard. They had to remove the bullet you left in him,” Christian says bitterly. “I don’t know where in this hospital he is, fortunately, or I’d probably kill him myself.”

I love how big, tough Chedward is always bragging about what he would do. Remember, it was Taylor and Sawyer who have beaten up Jack Hyde, and Ana hit that guy on the dance floor. Christian always just stands around talking about how he could kick somebody’s ass. I bet Claude Bastille isn’t even a real trainer he sees. He’s totally made up, so Christian can brag, “Yeah, I’m such a good kick boxer that I beat my trainer all the time. He’s really famous, his name is Claude Bastille, he’s won medals.” He’s the guy who doesn’t get involved in a real fight situation when it arises because he insists his fists are registered weapons and he would probably just go berserker and kill the guy, so it’s best if he sits that round out.

Ana assures Christian that she would never actually leave him:

“You took me by surprise,” I mutter into his shirt collar. “When we spoke at the bank. Thinking I was leaving you. I thought you knew me better. I’ve said to you over and over I would never leave.”

Uh, until you had this whole conversation with him about how you were going to leave.

Oh.

Oh shit.

I get it now.

Ana finally got angry enough with Christian that she expressed her anger and didn’t let him off the hook when he tried to fuck his way out of trouble. She didn’t rush to forgive him, so he was unforgiven when she said she was going to leave him. And the moral of the story that results is that because Ana put her foot down about Christian’s unacceptable treatment of her, she created a situation in which he believed she was mad enough to divorce him. This hurt Christian, and that’s the last thing Ana wants to do, so now she’ll probably never, ever do it again.

Christian explains that he had just arrived back in Seattle when the bank called him. He also tells her that he’s mad at her, Sawyer’s mad at her, everyone is mad at her, yadda yadda. Then a doctor comes in:

Dr. Bartley checks my ribs, her fingers probing gently but firmly.

I wince.

“These are bruised, not cracked or broken. You were very lucky, Mrs. Grey.”

Why didn’t they check her for broken ribs like, at any point while she was in the coma?

The doctor tells Ana that she might be able to go home the next day. Really? She was unconscious for more than twenty-four hours, you don’t want to keep her in the hospital for any further tests or observation? Okay. I won’t tell you how to do your job, but only because I really don’t care what happens to Ana.

There’s a knock on the door, and Taylor enters bearing a black cardboard box with Fairmont Olympic emblazoned in cream on the side.

Holy cow!

“Food?” Dr. Bartley says, surprised.

“Mrs. Grey is hungry,” Christian says. “This is chicken soup.”

Dr. Bartley smiles. “Soup will be fine, just the broth. Nothing heavy. Sh looks pointedly at both of us, then exits the room with Nurse Nora.

So, the doctor has made it pretty clear, only broth, right? Well, excuse me, but she might have experience in keeping people from dying and stuff, but she doesn’t have as much money as Christian and therefore he’s just a little bit wiser than her, okay?

Christian is unpacking the box, producing a thermos, soup bowl, side plate, linen napkin, soupspoon, a small basket of bread rolls, silver salt and pepper shakers… The Olympic has gone all-out.

I hope the  reason the doctor said Ana could only have broth, aka, the clear liquid diet, is because she’s on some medication that makes people super nauseated or gassy, and Ana spends the rest of this chapter puking and farting with bruised ribs while everyone stands around talking about how brave and remarkable she is.

“Well, after the bank called and I thought my world had completely fallen apart–” He can’t hide the pain in his voice.

I stop eating. Oh shit.

“Don’t stop eating, or I’ll stop talking,” he whispers, his tone adamant as he glares at me. I continue with my soup.

The soup, by the by, isn’t even broth-based, she describes it as “creamy.” And she eats bread, too. Because money is smarter than knowledge. Or something.

But look at how he manipulates her in that excerpt. He makes her feel guilty for making him believe his “world had completely fallen apart,” and when she reacts to the statement, he gives her a command, which she guiltily follows. He’s making it seem like she can’t count on the doctors or nurses. He’s telling her that everyone is mad at her. Then he’s setting himself up as the only person who truly wants what’s best for her, by controlling her food intake. This is some seriously messed up shit. It’s even more messed up that this was written into the story accidentally.

“Anyway, shortly after you and I had finished our conversation, Taylor informed me that Hyde had been granted bail. How, I don’t know, I thought we’d managed to thwart any attempts at bail. But that gave me a moment to think about what you’d said… and I knew something was seriously wrong.”

Hyde has committed arson, and has broken into the house of a person he is stalking with clear plans to commit rape, kidnapping, and murder. How on earth was he granted bail?

Ana is outraged that Christian believed she was after his money, and Christian keeps  telling her to eat, and Ana asks how Christian found her. Funny story:

“The Saab is fitted with a tracking device. All our cars are. By the time we got near the bank, you were already on the move, and we followed. Why are you smiling?”

“On some level I knew you’d be stalking me.”

“And that is amusing because?” he asks.

“Jack had instructed me to get rid of my cell. So I borrowed Whelan’s cell, and that’s the one I threw away. I put mine into one of the duffel bags so you could track your money.”

Are you scratching your head right now, going, “Uh… wait, that didn’t happen. We were in her POV and that didn’t happen… at least… I don’t remember…?” Well, you’re not crazy. Even though we were in Ana’s POV, we never saw the phone switch happen. During her ordeal, she didn’t think, “Christian will totally be able to find me and save me.” She didn’t even think, “I’m glad I put that phone in that bag.” This is totally new information she’s springing on us, and it’s so jarring because it comes from a narrator who gives us even the most boring, mundane little details of her life, from showering to what she does at work during the day. But this one major plot detail never entered into her inner monologue? This is sloppy writing in the extreme.

Plus, Ana’s car is fitted with a tracking device? And she didn’t know about it? That’s freaky, especially considering how quickly Chedward mobilized a response to her leaving him.

Ana asks Christian to sleep in the bed with her, so he does, and Ana tries to get him to talk about why he went to see Elena:

“Oh, Ana.” He groans. “You want to discuss that now? Can’t we drop this? I regret it, okay?”

Christian went to see his ex-lover, who has purposely meddled in his relationship with Ana, immediately after he exploded at Ana about daring to get pregnant, and Ana is supposed to just let it slide without further comment because he regrets it. Yeah, that sounds fair. It’s okay for you to do whatever you want, Chedward, just so long as you feel really bad about it, and then you’ll never have to answer for it. Ever.

He tells Ana they can talk tomorrow, and then she falls asleep. Nurse Nora is there when Ana wakes up for the ninth time in this chapter, and NN doesn’t like that Chedward and Ana are sharing a bed. Ana asks her to leave him alone, and then Christian has the fakest, most literal sleep babble anyone has ever uttered:

He mumbles in his sleep, “Don’t touch me. No more. Only Ana.”

Ana goes to sleep (again) and wakes up (again) and Christian is gone. Carrick is there, and he’s just come by to remind the reader that Ana is a brave and wonderful hero. He tells Ana that Mia is home now and very angry because of what she went through, and that Grace won’t let Mia out of her sight.

“You need watching, too,” he admonishes. “I don’t want you taking any more silly risks with your life or the life of my grandchild.”

I flush. He knows!

“Grace read your chart. She told me. Congratulations.”

Why the fuck was Grace reading her chart? She’s not Grace’s patient. Yeah, Ana is family, but that’s precisely the reason why Grace shouldn’t have read Ana’s chart. That is incredibly intrusive. She should have asked for permission. No fucking wonder Christian doesn’t know shit about boundaries.

Hey, know what I noticed about this whole thing? Ana saved Mia’s life. And even though everyone acknowledges that she saved Mia’s life, they still say she’s stupid and shouldn’t have done it. That’s Mary Sueishness of the highest degree; the family members of the person Ana endangered herself to save are telling her they wished she hadn’t done it, because she got hurt. Sorry, Mia, but at least you know where you rank now. No wonder she’s angry.

About the baby, Carrick says:

“Christian will come around,” he says gently. “This will be the best thing for him. Just… give him some time.”

You’re right, Carrick! When someone is an abusive, controlling monster toward his wife, the very best thing for him is to have to adapt his volatile temper and rigorous thinking around a child. That’s a sure fire cure for psychological issues.

Carrick also assures Ana that the doctors, Dr. Bartley (who is African-American) and Dr. Singh (who has a name of Asian origin) are good doctors. You know, just in case they needed to be vetted by a safe white lady.

Christian brings Ana breakfast, and marvels at how hungry she is. She says:

“It’s because I’m pregnant, Christian.”

Um… you’re barely pregnant. It’s probably because you were in a coma and you’re always perched on the very edge of starvation, to begin with.

Christian has come to accept the fact that he’s going to be a father, but he’s afraid he’s not going to be a very good one. Don’t worry, Chedward. Grace and Carrick have both unequivocally stated, having kids changes people, so you’ll probably be fine. Ana even thinks so:

“Of course you can. You’re loving, you’re fun, you’re strong, you’ll set boundaries. Our child will want for nothing.”

Photo on 2013-10-03 at 13.27

Do you hear yourself, book?

How is Christian going to set boundaries? He has no clue what they are. The only boundaries we’ve seen him set have been this grandiose, bizarre ones, like “You’re not allowed to come past the Mississippi,” or “If you roll your eyes, I’ll spank you.” He’s paying for his ex-stalker’s art school tuition. This is not a man who could define “boundaries” on a vocabulary test.

“Yes, it would have been ideal to have waited. To have longer, just the two of us. But we’ll be three of us, and we’ll all grow up together. We’ll be a family. Our own family. And your child will love you unconditionally, like I do.”

A) You need to be grown up before the baby gets there. Because you’re the grown ups, and your shit needs to be at least partially figured out before you decide to take on another human life. It’s not the baby’s responsibility to teach you shit about life and how to grow up. B) You don’t have to have kids to be a family. C) Your child might love you unconditionally, for a while. But then it gets older, and it realizes that you’re a shitty parent, and it gets a blog and it tells EVERYONE.

Then Ana calls the baby Blip, and Christian is all:

“I had the name Junior in my head.”

And Ana is all:

“Junior it is, then.”

And then Christian is like:

“But I like Blip.”

And I go: It doesn’t really matter what you idiots call it now, because your moms are Grace and Carla, so you’re going to name the baby Grarlac anyway. And then the chapter is over.


177 Comments on “50 Shades Freed (and not as previously reported, Darker) chapter 23 recap or “THE FOG.””

  1. V says:

    A question I haven’t seen covered yet: is it really possible to suffer a “serious contusion to the head” and a skull fracture without having *any* concussion/swelling to worry about? Especially if she’s in a Goddamn induced coma.

    • bearcatbanana says:

      Speaking as someone who’s had a serious head injury that resulted in short term memory loss (and not speaking as a doctor), no. Nothing about this hospital scene is grounded in real life.

      I haven’t read the chapter. But based on Jenny’s quotes of Ana’s experiences with THE FOG, James has exactly zero knowledge of what it’s like to wake up from unconsciousness in a hospital. It’s extremely disorienting (maybe more so for me, because I still don’t remember the accident).

      Also, there’s several different kinds of “FOG” that you experience. One is the confusion and disorientation of trying to piece together what happened. Two is the head injury itself. Three is all the drugs they put you on for the pain.

      And that’s just the hospital experience: I went to the doctor for three different scans after I left the hospital. I had to visit my old therapist (at the hospital’s request) to make sure I hadn’t had any shifts in my pre-existing mental illness. It was a lot to deal with.

      • Insanitydividedbyzero says:

        I was in a medically induced coma and experienced something very similar with the disorientation. I had broken my back, both of my legs, my left arm and most of my ribs and the first thing I did was try to get up even though I was in traction. I had no idea I had even been in an accident. Fortunately for me I only had a small knock on the noggin but even though all the tests were done showed that I didn’t have any swelling in my brain, my doc still checked everything thoroughly, shining the light in my eyes and asking questions, etc. I even went through a lot more tests just to make sure my head was okay because head injuries are the most serious (I’m sorry you had to go through that) and there is no way in hell a doctor would release a patient right after a head injury puts them in a coma.

    • The-Great-Dragon says:

      Adding on top of what bearcatbanana (awesome username) said, from what I’ve read, if someone (in this case, Ana) suffers a blow to the head that knocks them out for longer than, like, a few seconds, they’re probably in for some serious damage. Getting knocked out doesn’t work like it does on TV. A blow to the head followed by long periods of unconsciousness is generally a REALLY bad sign.

      I can kind of half-forgive E.L. for this because it’s such a common trope in fiction, but it’s still massively irritating.

      Also, my sister suffered a concussion once, and it didn’t knock her out, but she had to get rushed to the hospital. They also wanted to check up on her after she got released. Comparably, Ana’s pregnant, she’s been beaten up, she’s underweight, and she was in a coma. The blow was enough to knock her out, so there would have had to have been at least some damage. A concussion is really likely, and if it’s not a concussion, then it must’ve been something else. She suffered trauma to the cranium, no one’s just going to be like “Let her sleep it off, she’ll be fine.”

      So, in answer to your question, from my limited knowledge (as I am not a health care professional in any capacity) I’d say no. Especially since, the way the story’s structured, the head wound seems to be the cause of her coma in the first place.

      • The-Great-Dragon says:

        I feel really ridiculous that I only thought to look up ‘contusion’ after I’d posted my response. I thought I understood what contusion was, I did not.

        So a contusion’s a bruise, apparently. Interestingly enough, a purplish, flat bruise is referred to medically as an “ecchymosis.’ Which means the bruise Ana has is like the regular kind, which usually comes with swelling. Contusions are caused by tiny blood vessels breaking, and the raised area is caused by blood leaking into the tissue. Swelling’s usually cause by a buildup of liquid or by inflammation (the body’s response to injury and a way the body tries to protect itself while it heals.)

        If I’m understanding all this correctly, that means that a contusion (esp. the one Ana had) would naturally come with swelling, either because of the broken blood vessels and buildup of liquid or because the body’s trying to heal itself (though likely from both.)

        (and it just seems like Ana’s injury, by definition, is a concussion. There’s no way she doesn’t have swelling, is what I’m saying.)
        (sorry I took up so much space with my comments.)

    • Eff Leukemia says:

      Well, yes and no, from my experience.

      Disclaimer: I am not medically trained, I am simply someone who has managed to injure himself in basically every way without ever managing to break a bone.

      About a year ago, I had a bike (cycle, not motor) crash after chemo (long story). I don’t remember the impact, and using my gps watch, I apparently don’t really remember the 45 minutes after the crash. However, during that time, I was able to make a phone call (which I remember), and accept 3 follow up phone calls (which I remember answering one, not the content, and nothing of the other 2).

      I had cuts and bruises on my knees, lip, nose, cheeks. My family picked me up, brought me to the ER. From crash to MRI was about an hour and a half or so. There was no visible effect on me from the impact, despite taking it mainly straight to the face. I had no swelling, no internal bleeding, nothin’. I was released that night, without ever being placed in-patient.

      That’s despite actively dealing with leukemia, and being a few weeks post treatment.

      Basically, what I’m saying is, sometimes head injuries are funny. I didn’t read these books, so maybe they are scheduling follow ups that we don’t hear about, but if there’s no sign of internal bleeding on an MRI, and the patient doesn’t have headaches or lingering pain, or tingling, or any real signs of lasting damage…they might actually get released pretty quickly.

    • You have to have a brain to get brain damage. She’s fine.

  2. marzipanpieplate says:

    “It’s okay for you to do whatever you want, Chedward, just so long as you feel really bad about it, and then you’ll never have to answer for it. Ever.”

    Perhaps he’s Catholic?

    Ack, this recap is my worst nightmare. I hate medical stuff because of the lack of control. You have to trust perfect strangers to take care of you and, you know, not kill you. I wouldn’t even allow my mom to put band-aids on me when I was a kid — I had to do it myself. Add to the mix all the terrible people in this terrible book being terrible and I was getting panicked just imagining it. Never thought I’d think this but…poor Ana. Everyone in her life is complicit with her abuser. (Related: Where’s her best friend? Wouldn’t she be there? Instead of her in-laws who’ve met her, what, twice? Wouldn’t they be with their actual daughter who probably needs a shit ton of therapy and support? Oh right, everyone in this book is a monster.)

    • Sophie says:

      her abuser has given his security staff a list of people she’s not allowed to see. without her knowledge. Kate’s probably on that list…

    • longtime reader, sometime commenter says:

      Poor Mia! First her asshat brother invites this nitwit into the family, and now her own parents won’t visit her in the hospital because they’re more concerned about Lil’ Miss Mary Sue!

  3. My reaction to this chapter: http://tympanus.net/codrops/2013/07/17/troubleshooting-css/wat/

    Actually, that could be my reaction to the whole three books, but I digress. This chapter made me more stabby than usual, purely on the basis that everything in it is wrong–except for the doctor, who smartly advises Ana to stay on the liquid diet or else she’ll spew burrito chunks (http://popdose.com/wp-content/uploads/heatherchandler.jpg). I’ve waken up from many a surgery hungry, and whenever I eat something that isn’t crushed ice or chicken broth, I turn into Old Faithful. If Chedward is spoon-feeding her creamy soup and bread, he’s a fucking idiot.

    But we all knew that.

    • The-Great-Dragon says:

      I honestly had my fingers crossed that Ana was going to throw up on Christian.

    • Jemmy says:

      I can eat straight after I wake up from surgery without a problem. If it is say a day procedure and I’ve fasted the night before, I wake up starving and I get some sandwiches the hospital provides. My husband has worked in a few wards and tells me I’m fairly unusual though. Apparently the anaethetics make ppl a bit wonky.

      What Ana has been through I think is quite different, and given all the various circumstances, she should be throwing up for sure.

  4. ipooprainbows says:

    The Darkness are still around! Just saw them do a show earlier this year. SPECTACULAR!!

    • Rachel says:

      Yeah! I was just about to say that! The lead singer had a lot of drug issues so the band took a break until he could get himself sorted out. I saw them last year at the Troc in Philly and they were so awesome!! They have a new album out too I think. I can’t wait to see them again when they come back! :D

  5. Lynn says:

    First of all, YAY recaps! I looked forward to this one since I finished the last one over a week ago.

    Second of all, again…your recaps give me insight that I never noticed before when I read the books. While Christian always came off as a douche, his level of douchiness increases to epic proportions.

    Third of all, something you said about Grace looking at Ana’s chart clicked something with me. In my own story, I had originally written a scene where my main character’s sister (who is a nurse) is transferred to the hospital in the area that my main lives at when my main gets severely injured midway through the story. However, my editor inquired if my main’s sister would be able to do that so I did some research. If a relative of a nurse or doctor is hospitalized, that nurse or doctor won’t be able to cover their relative because there’s a chance the nurse or doctor may not be able to make decisions because of their emotions related to the relative (or something along those lines). So, considering Ana is Grace’s daughter in law, I doubt that the hospital would’ve let her cover Ana.

    • Thea Karan says:

      That’s one of the things that I learnt from watching medical tv show. It’s not only that they are discouraged, sometimes they are outright forbidden to treat relatives, spouses or close friends and I always find it strange when a patient is treated by a friend in a movie. Also, transferring to another hospital seems downright implausible. But yes, good points you make there.

    • Anonymous says:

      Agreed. It’s not technically illegal, but most hospital ethics policies would either discourage or outright prohibit Grace from treating Ana (especially in a life threatening situation). However, it doesn’t sound like Grace was one of Ana’s physicians in this chapter. In that case, she has no legal right to access Ana’s health information, and her chart snooping is actually a serious violation of federal HIPAA laws.

  6. Anonymous says:

    ” B) You don’t have to have kids to be a family.”

    Thanks for that. I actually quit a job because I was told I had to work all the holidays so that my coworkers could spend time with their families – mine not counting because I hadn’t reproduced.

    • Thea Karan says:

      I hate this idea that you have to convey to some stereotype of society that tells you to get married and have kids and that’s just what you do and how you get a happy ending. I mean, yes, I do want that, but not because that’s how it should be – because it’s what I want and I fully realize that that’s not what everyone ones. Your family is just as much of family as married couples with kids, and I am sorry that that’s not acknowledged everywhere or every time.

  7. Laura says:

    Grarlac is absolutely a winner of a name!

  8. Ilex says:

    Oh, no — you’re totally right that “Grarlac” will be the poor kid’s name. Good for boys or girls!

    Also, you made me dash off and look up The Darkness, and Wikipedia claims they’ve reunited. “I believe in a thing called love …”

  9. katzentier says:

    The hospitalstuff is so disconected from reality…

    I’m a nurse and at least around here, we’ll make sure the patient can get up and everything (after a doctor has given permission) before we’ll remove catheters. You don’t want your patients to stumble around in pain and/or desorientation, or use an uncomfortable bedpan every five minutes (when you’re probably not supposed to move around much anyway, because head injury, and especially if they didn’t even check for broken parts untill then, which is completely unrealistic on it’s own). Seriously.

    And yeah, I would have thrown Chedward out. Unacceptable behaviour.

    It’s not the worst about this book, but I hate it when books or movies get medical stuff all wrong. What’s up with no one ever being able to provide proper first aid, for example? >_<

  10. Thea Karan says:

    I love you for that re-cap! Especially the last line – that name sounds like a medieval monster or something! By the way – the line where Ana’s dad talks about ‘putting her over his knee’ is creepy on another level – if he was abusive it explains why Ana is into Christian. Unless he was joking. But what kind of a joke is that to make about your 22-year-old married AND pregnant daughter!

    • Anna says:

      I find the whole spanking thing from her dad extra creepy because that’s the way her hubby likes to get his jollies off. It just screams Electra complex to me.

      • katzentier says:

        This is exactly why you’re not supposed to say hurtfull stuff in the presence of a comatose patient. You never know if they are hearing you and there are enough known instances where they did (and things like “he shouldn’t be alive, what a sorry existence etc.” were said).

        The greys are a bunch of assholes, all the more because it strikes me as highly unlikely any family with a doctor or nurse in it would have never heard of these things. We talk about our work at home. I’m sure grace did that too.

        Then again, we already know that she doesn’t give a fuck about work ethics.

      • katzentier says:

        And no one in the grey-universe has ever heard of confidentiality…

      • rwelbirg says:

        @katzentier. That’s because no one in the Grey universe exists outside of Ana’s direct experience. This is the Truman Show, or that episode of Farscape.

    • zee says:

      Just to make this even more depraved – Ray’s her stepfather, not her biological father. Maybe he conditioned her into loving him so much that she grew up believing that Stockholm Syndrome is how you love someone.

      Which makes Carla an even worse mother. She’s an enabler, she sent Anna after Christian in the first book for sex, right?

      • Lynn says:

        “Which makes Carla an even worse mother. She’s an enabler, she sent Anna after Christian in the first book for sex, right?”
        Correct

  11. Lillies says:

    In my head I heard Braniac! O.O”

  12. Sam says:

    “hirself”

    … Just use singluar they.

    You are leaving out every single person whose preferred gender pronouns are not “hir/hirs”, it is not a gender neutral pronoun, singular they is.

    • laina1312 says:

      …dude, I’m pretty sure it was a typo of “herself” since Jenny had her particular person on her mind. She was also specifically talking about women. If you want to talk about how men are abused, as are people who don’t identify as female or male, or whatever, sure, that’s valid, but do you really need to pick on what’s obviously a typo?

    • Jenny Trout says:

      It wasn’t a typo. I used “hirself” because I thought it was the gender-disrespective reflexive third person. While I realize intent “isn’t magic,” it wasn’t my intention to leave anyone out. I’ll use they in the future.

  13. Anonymous says:

    No Screaming Trees mention for “sweet oblivion”?

  14. Jellyfish says:

    Awesome recap again :) While I do look forward to your recaps I totally get that you have a lot on your plate and these things take time. I’ve written fanfic and I’ve moderated forums so I know how draining this kind of stuff can be. I’m grateful that you put aside the time to do them and I’ll happily wait as long as necessary.
    —-

    “Of course you can. You’re loving, you’re fun, you’re strong, you’ll set boundaries. Our child will want for nothing.”

    Okay I got as far as ‘… you’re fun…’ before I burst out laughing. Fun? Remember Chedward’s reaction when Ana wanted to try the jetski on their honeymoon? I don’t remember him reacting like a man who liked others having fun. And then there’s his distainful attitude towards people who watch TV. Nothing is fun unless he finds it fun and only as long as it’s his idea and he feels like letting the person in question do it.

    He is a joyless, jealous, petty, dictatorial snob. Has he ever even given a genuine smile? Even when he’s supposed to be happy he comes across to me like a self satisfied douche canoe because his happiness always, in the end, comes at the expense of someone else whether it be Ana or the staff and service workers he pushes around.

  15. Neurite says:

    Oh wow. Yes, I guess all these defenders of the book were right. Chedward does eventually have a moment of insight, sees the error of his overly controlling ways, and decides he has to “get better” (except for the part where we get evidence immediately afterwards that his behavior hasn’t changed at all, but nevermind that just now.) And the changing point comes from realizing he’ll be a father.

    So the message here is that if your partner is controlling, violent, terrifying abuser, you can love him better, and the best way to change him is by having a baby. Then he will have to shape up and become a better person. This even works when, like Chedward, he really didn’t want to have children in the first place. Just surprise him by becoming pregnant! This will magically fix your relationship.

    …yeah, that is a great and responsible message to send to readers.

  16. Katje says:

    I just about died at “Grarlac”. Omg. Can’t breathe.

  17. Renie says:

    A quote about breaking up with an abuser: You may break their heart, but in the meantime, they’re destroying your soul.

    Great recap, as always!

  18. Amber says:

    Ha! Grarlac. I nearly spit my dinner all over my laptop, thank you very much.

  19. Kat says:

    I absolutely lost my shit at Grarlac.

  20. sometimeswan says:

    Just wondering if you’d seen the SNL spoof of the ‘Fifty Shades of Grey’ screen tests: http://tv.msn.com/tv/article.aspx?news=831938

  21. Alex says:

    Okay seriously, has James never been to a hospital? When the doctor says, “Just broth,” they don’t do it to spite you or something! I wasn’t too happy about that either (the broth was terrible, but I was this close to just pouring it down my throat because I had been on a strict diet of NOTHING for a couple of days) but I acknowledged why I had to do it and accepted it.

    In my experience, when people eat something richer, like a creamy soup, after not eating for days, they get diarrhea. The next time Christian carries her to the toilet will be fun!

  22. TotallyLegit says:

    I’m really glad you have a recap up, because I have some homework to procrastinate on. I was going to do it, I really was, but when I opened my school website this popped up:

    And then I knew what I had to do. Share it. Because… bible studies? Really?

  23. Awesome recap as usual! I have to admit that when people around me say that they “really liked those books!” I have to make sure I politely disagree and conversationally point them to your blog rather than explode in rage and melt into a puddle of sad.

    Also, a minor point: Ender’s Shadow is actually a really good example of writing a parallel a story already told (Ender’s Game) and I highly, highly recommend reading both. It is the only example I can think of, though.

    • cecilhungry says:

      Parallel novels can work, but they need to tell a different story than the original novel. Ender’s Shadow wasn’t JUST Ender’s Game from Bean’s perspective–it was also a story about the younger kids in Ender’s jeesh, and about Bean’s struggle with Achilles and his own humanity. It also sets up the sequels about Earth after Ender left. As far as I know (admittedly, haven’t read) Midnight Sun and 50 Shades of Christian are just Twilight/FSoG only we get to hear about how awesome AnaBella is from a different perspective. And it’s even more unintentionally creepy. And that’s fucking boring (especially, and I don’t doubt this is the case, when the author can’t really write more than one narrative voice).

      • Stagewhisper says:

        The most masterful ‘parallel’ novels I can think of are Margaret Atwood’s sequels to Oryx and Crake, Year of the Flood and MaddAddam. While I haven’t read the latter yet, the former works spectacularly because it uses a fairly minor character in the first book to give a more complete look into how other people survived an apocalyptic event, as well as give more perspective on this character as well as the narrator of the first book in retrospect, as well as pick up where the first book’s timeline left off to resolve something there. I am really looking forward to the third book, which from the name appears to be the perspective of a character even more tangential (but ultimately important) in the scope of the events leading up to and following the world as we know it…

  24. Reenie says:

    LOL I just looked up the meaning of litany… one of the possible meaning is “A tedious recital or repetitive series.” So EL was quite right to use it lol

  25. Erin says:

    On other 50 shades related news, Jennifer Ehle has been cast as Ana’s mother. Another good actress signing on to this shit film. When will it end?!
    Also, a Facebook post i just read

    “The film will be a low budget film that should do good box-office. If people think a kinky romance like Fifty Shades of Grey is porn, they really need to read some real porn. There’s not even any sex until the eight chapter, the character are in love and faithful to each other. The prose is definitely lacking but Fifty Shades is a fun, silly romantic trilogy about the power of love to cure a damaged soul. I think taking a small part in it is a good career move on Jennifer’s part. She’s connecting with Focus Features and a great production team.”

    I think I just got an aneurysm.
    “Love, FUN, silly, romantic, the power of WUV” are the exact opposite of this ‘book’ series.

  26. The-Great-Dragon says:

    Omg, I just remember Noah Logan again. (I’m doomed to only remember him after everyone’s already commented on the chapters. Dammit.)

  27. CJ says:

    I have to say that I was actually kind of happy they said she was brave here. I mean, her way of going about things wasn’t exactly the best, but she did end up saving Mia’s life. It actually bothers me a lot more that, right after she wakes up from a coma, the first thing everyone seems to need to remind her of is that she did something stupid. Like, sure, you saved someone else’s life by risking your own, and in most books this would deserve some congrats, but since you’re in 50 Shades, you get condescending congratulations followed by reminders of how you can’t take care of yourself because you’re a child, wait I meant woman.

    I think everyone else already addressed the medical issues, so I’ll ignore that beyond saying that if I ever met Chedward/saw someone acting like that…instant hatred, and no, Grace, not because I really just love them.

  28. KC says:

    Did anyone else read ‘the fog’ and have immediate flashbacks to Tess of the D’urbervilles? Wasn’t the rape scene in that book described as ‘and the fog rolled in’? So every time the fog closed in on her in this recap I had to suppress an impulse to shout, “Beware the fog!”

    Thanks for doing this Jen. This cannot be a fun exercise for you, but you always do a wonderful job of saving us from having to read this book.

  29. Erin says:

    Another medical comment here — I always thought that if you have a catheter, you don’t have to pee. Liquid doesn’t get a chance to fill up your bladder because it drips out through the catheter pretty much immediately. So Ana shouldn’t have any urgency about peeing until a while after the catheter was removed. Or do I have this totally wrong?

  30. I. Hate. These. Books.

    They are stupid, badly written, badly researched, badly executed, and filled to the brim with misogynist, anti-feminist, kink-shaming, slut-shaming, anti-choice BULLSHIT that has become far too much for me to handle without rage-quitting like a twelve year old playing Halo.

    At first, I was super excited by this series because I hoped that it would make more people believe that BDSM was not a “dangerous” kink and that I was not “fucked up” for practicing it, but upon reading a few excerpts I realized that it is a manual for how NOT to have healthy BDSM sex and even worse, it relays the message that we ARE messed up because we have not found true love.

    How in the world did this steaming pile of shit outsell Harry Potter? I was angry enough with the messages in Twilight, but this is worse because I cannot even excuse Christian’s behavior as literally being “from a different time” like Edward Cullen. This is a grown man manipulating a grown woman into becoming an obedient house-frau that he wants “barefoot and pregnant” in his kitchen.

    It is mortifying that someone wrote this completely accurate narrative of abuse ON ACCIDENT with the intention that it was romance, and people are buying it! This proves that we live in a rape culture and it is absolutely terrifying.

    Something that has been bothering me:
    Ana and Christian are always bemoaning the very idea of Ana being dominant, but wasn’t Christian submissive when he was with Mrs. Robinson? I understand that Elena was a rapist, but is it just me or does this book frame it like her worst crime was being the dominant party?

    ALSO, if Ana had a catheter she wouldn’t have had to pee because catheters are used to transport urine from the bladder when a patient cannot move or is incapable of discharging urine by his or herself. That little detail and the fact that her “needing to pee” being used as yet another reason for Christian to invade her privacy is beyond annoying to me.

  31. TokenOfficeGoth says:

    This is random but, is it not REALLY fucked up that Christian is telling everyone her wife is pregnant without her permission? Everyone knows now, but lets say she did want an abortion, now everyone else is going to inject their two cents into their private decision before they have even made it…

  32. kg says:

    Having a child doesn’t instantly change people, but it can change the way you think about things, if you choose. For me, I think about things from a less selfish perspective. Each person is different.

  33. Insanitydividedbyzero says:

    What is wrong with EL James? She seems to think that corporal punishment is okay for not only children but errant wives? She seems to have some confusion about the difference between children and wives, which grosses me out. I was never spanked as a child, for punishment, and if a guy ever tried to spank me as an adult, for punishment, he’d have a broken nose.

    It is pretty funny that while I’ve been rereading these recaps I’ve been watching documentaries and today it was the one about the Roman Emperor Caligula and he was considered one of the worst, most violent, and one of the younger ones. He only ruled for 1400 days but he was known for torturing people and enjoying it. Anyhoo, it seemed that every term they used to describe him seemed to describe Chedward perfectly.

  34. Ms. Heathen says:

    I did actually read a very good book where the story was retold from two character’s points of view. It was Fingersmith by Sarah Waters. There was a very good reason for the double POV in that one, and some nice twists and surprises came of it.

    Blip is still a better name than Renesmee.

  35. I would love to read this book from another character’s POV, just not Chedward’s. I want Taylor’s account of all is bullshit. I want to know what he really think about the 2 balloons he’s been hired to protect. Plus, I KNOW whatever him and Mrs. Jones are doing is trillion times kinkier than what’s been going in Edwanabellian’s bedroom.


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